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This is an example answer I wrote for this question.
I don’t expect you to write at this level, but you can see the types of sentences plus the vocabulary at this level.
writeandimprove.com gave this a C2 level.
Today, more than ever, local authorities are facing unprecedented demands in relation to funding facilities such as sports centres and local parks. There are many factors to take into account when deciding how to allocate funds.
While many people regard sports centres as places to merely enjoy different forms of exercise, it is important to also consider fringe benefits. Having increasing demands on our time in the form of long working hours coupled with commuting, spending time playing sport not only provides the opportunity to experience the thrill of competing but it also
provides an environment conducive to social interaction, both during the match or activity and while relaxing in the bar afterwards. Although playing with friends in a semi-competitive atmosphere is the most common approach, it is often possible to take a course or have individual sessions with a professional coach.
The advantages previously discussed might suggest that this is an open-and-shut case. However, there are reasons for choosing local parks which many would say outweigh those of sports centres. Imagine an elderly couple holding hands sitting on a bench while excited children are climbing on play equipment a short distance from a group of their mothers who are chatting while keeping a keen eye on their offspring. In the distance, tennis courts and a bowling green are in continuous use. At any time, the participants and observers can take advantage of the all-day café which provides delicious, tasty snacks as well as a light lunch.
Naturally, there is a cost in terms of cutting the grass and maintaining flower beds, but the staff and equipment involved are usually in operation at several such locations.
Individuals might choose based solely on their personal preferences, but local authorities need to look at the wider population. The opportunity to be in a safe haven away from the pollution of the city, not to mention streets clogged with traffic, gives local parks the edge in the eyes of many people. 328 words.
13/20
Logical organisation. Good sentence structure.
Too short. Need to go into more detail.
Spelling mistakes.
Global warming isn’t relevant to this topic.
Vocabulary is too basic and other grammar structures would improve it.
Cambridge examiners might give you a lower score.
Please look at my example answer on the web page.
This would get a very low score.
The question says to choose 2 of the options and decide which is the most important; you wrote about all 3 options.
Vocabulary and grammar are too basic.
It wasn’t long enough.
Please look at my example answer on the web page.
11/20
You use a lot of short sentences. Try to link them together.
You didn’t follow the instructions to answer the question.
You had to write about only 2 and then decide which is the most important.
Grammar and vocabulary is too low for C1 level.
Cambridge examiners might give a different score.
Please look at my example answer on the web page.
13/20
Cambridge examiners might give you a lower score.
Good organisation.
Too short.
Vocabulary and grammar are too basic for C1 level.
14/20
Your general language and style are at C1 level.
Some mistakes and awkwardness of language would lower your score.
The Cambridge marking scheme is quite strict.
15/20
Excellent effort. Definitely C1 level.
Cambridge marking is strict, so an examiner might give a lower score.
Although your organisation is good, you need to clearly separate paragraphs to make it easier to read.
The word count is at the lower end.
10/20
You need to write an introduction before discussing points in detail.
Too short.
Vocabulary and grammar are too basic for C1 level.
11/20
Organisation was generally good.
It seemed quite short.
You need to give specific examples of why people would use the facilities.
Vocabulary is often too basic for C1 level.
12/20
Good writing style.
Organisation is generally good. Separate the paragraphs clearly.
It seems to be too short.
The question said that you have to choose the most important of 2 options; you didn’t.
Cambridge examiners might give a different score.
12/20
Generally well-organised.
Some good vocabulary, but some sentences were awkward.
The paragraph about sports centres needs details about why people would use them and the specific benefits.
Cambridge examiners might give a different score.
10/20
Too short.
Vocabulary and grammar are too basic for C1 level.
You need to give more details and examples regarding why or how people use or will use the facilities.