Thursday
Total 15/20
Content 4 Communicative Achievement 4
Organisation 4 Language 3
(+) Good attempt even though the word order was confusing at times
(-) Separate the paragraphs more clearly.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 15/20
Content 4 Communicative Achievement 5
Organisation 3 Language 3
(+) Good writing style.
Good vocabulary
(-) Separate the paragraphs more clearly.
Was there a third topic?
Quite long, so less opinion and more detail
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 12/20
Content 4 Communicative Achievement 3
Organisation 2 Language 3
(+) Some good ideas
(-) Don’t include all topics in the same paragraph.
Use more specific vocabulary.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 13/20
Content 4 Communicative Achievement 3
Organisation 3 Language 3
(+) Sentence construction was good in general.
(-) Don’t include specific examples in the introduction or conclusion.
Use more specific vocabulary.
Spelling mistakes.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 10/20
Content 3 Communicative Achievement 3
Organisation 2 Language 2
(+) Sentence construction was good in general.
(-) Too short. Didn’t give yourself the chance to develop ideas.
You didn’t write about your choice of topic.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 15/20
Content 4
Communicative Achievement 4
Organisation 3
Language 4
(+) Good writing style and accuracy.
Good vocabulary
(-) You wrote about card in 2 paragraphs. Keep the topic in one paragraph.
Don’t include specific examples in the introduction or summary.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 14/20
Content 4
Communicative Achievement 4
Organisation 3
Language 3
(+) Generally easy to read.
(-) Don’t include all topics in the same paragraph.
Use more specific vocabulary.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 13/20
Content 4
Communicative Achievement 3
Organisation 3
Language 3
(+) Included all 3 topics.
Transport paragraph was good.
(-) Make the introduction slightly longer.
Use more specific vocabulary.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 11/20
Content 3
Communicative Achievement 3
Organisation 3
Language 2
(+) You included 3 topics although in a short way for one of them.
(-) Didn’t give enough detail or use specific vocabulary.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Introduction shouldn’t include specific examples.
Conclusion or summary should be clearer.
Total 12/20
Content 3
Communicative Achievement 3
Organisation 3
Language 3
(+) Sentence construction was good in general.
(-) Didn’t give enough detail or use specific vocabulary.
You didn’t write about your choice of topic in detail.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though
Total 16/20
Content 5
Communicative Achievement 5
Organisation 3
Language 3
(+) A really good attempt.
Good vocabulary
(-) Don’t include specific examples in the introduction or conclusion.
Some of the conclusion should be in the paragraphs.
Try to use language for contrast: although, even though