Friday
15/20
Excellent attempt.
Some good vocabulary but try to use more higher-level words.
Try to use other grammar: although, if, while/whereas
16/20
Excellent attempt.
Try to use other grammar: although, if, while/whereas
12/20
Good attempt. Needs more detail and grammar.
Was the last paragraph the idea of your own or a conclusion/summary?
18/20
Excellent.
Content score wasn’t 5 as you could go into more detail.
Some spelling mistakes but they didn’t affect understanding.
13/20
A good try. You can improve your score with a few changes.
Was there a third idea of your own?
You talked about solutions but didn’t go into enough detail with examples.
16/20
Excellent writing style. Good organisation.
Sometimes it seemed like you were repeating the same idea in 2 sentences.
Try to use other grammar: although, while, if.
Could have included details about what manufacturers and producers can do to help.
It would be better to end with a short summary or conclusion.
14/20
Excellent writing style.
You didn’t give a solution to river and sea pollution.
We swim in the sea; we have a bath at home (nella vasca).
You gave details of problems but didn’t always give solutions.
Try to increase the range of grammar: if, although, while.
13/20
Good writing style, organisation and vocabulary.
Could suggest solutions such as manufacturers producing cleaner vehicles.
You didn’t include an idea of your own. You mentioned recycling and plastic but didn’t go into detail.
15/20
Excellent writing style and use of language.
Good organisation using paragraphs.
You need more detail about rivers and seas, so that affects your Content score.
17/20
Excellent effort.
You could improve the grammar by using while, although, etc
It was impossible to read.
9/20
There was some good vocabulary.
The organisation wasn’t clear.
Use mixed case instead of upper case all the time.
14/20
Excellent writing style.
Good use of linking words.
Word count was near the minimum.
Aiming for 190 words lets you add more details to your ideas.
Need to separate ideas into paragraphs as this affects the Organisation mark.
Try to increase the range of grammar: if, although, other tenses.